I like it alot. Caroline is far more sane than some people I know irl.
You make good use with metaphors and similes. Your writing style is like a hot evening alone in a bubble bath with plenty of AAA batteries.
Blood just gushing out the motherfucker, and here I am with an electrical cord trying to tie off the damn artery. You ever be laying by the side of the road covered in another man's blood talking to the cops and your girlfriend breaks up with you? I have.
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Honestly I think I use them a little too much. I have to be really careful to keep my writing colorful while at the same time not just breaking off onto some tangent and distracting the reader from the main plot.
I have a feeling when I re-write this novel, I'm going to go nuts with my editing knife. I had to add a lot of the stuff to the last one, frankly, a lot of stuff noone has ever read, but hopefully I'll be able to do the opposite with this second novel. I'm already coming up with plot for book three, the last of this series.
are you my long lost fish?
CRAP!
How did you find me? I thought I'd finally gotten free!
Location: Memphis, TN ie, HELL
I absolutely have to agree. Not just Memphis, but this state in general. Most of it sucks ass, except the more obscure parts that have less GUN TOTIN' HOOTIN' N' HOLLERIN' type of people.
It sounds like my city is being bombed on the 4th of July, because all of the hillbillies (read: hillbillies, not rednecks) are shooting their hand-cannons and shotguns in the air.
BAN ME BUTT MONKEY
You finished these quickly for such good writing.
I've been spending less time on the BBS. Really, I've been kicking myself in the ass for wasting so much time and not working on my book(s).
I have a third one in the works to complete this series, and after THAT I'm going to write a philosophical work called "The Book of Hate" which I may plan a later derivative series on.
Fuck you funk
Why don't you go snort borax?
hunte3r
not bad, not bad at all